Jasmine Hart

Hi. The emotion which you express here is good, but I think that you can channel it differently. I'll get back to this in a minute, for now I want ...

Hi, welcome. First off I'd look at the format of this, as it makes for difficult reading. Maybe try something like this; "The way that it sings is like a ...

Hi. First off, I'd think about maybe rating this for content. I think the beginning is a little slow. Maybe cut the "so", and chaneg "dear" to "darling" so that ...

Hi, I'm doing a project and need to talk about horror poetry for part of it. Does anyone know of any good examples? If you happened to know the links ...

Friday? Suicre. Claudette, would it be ok to interview you? If so, should I just email questions to you, or would you rather me to pm them? Also, are intervies ...

Ya, she did. She was depressed. She's tried to kill herself before and had to go for electro shock therapy and everything. She was very troubled, but brilliant none the ...

I love sonnets.This was a very enjoyable read. You were faithful to the meter throughout, and this flowed very well. I think I'd change the first line slightly, so that ...

Congrats guys! Jas

This is really beautiful Bubbles. Kind of feel like I've come out of a trance after reading that... I love; "Leaning closer, I brush aside the cobwebs and taste the ...

This was brill, Matt. I love how you express yourself. Your imagery is so fresh, and you're beautifully honest. I'm not sure about the rhyme in the beginning though, it ...

Woah Via, this is some powerful stuff. Claudette and smorgishbord have covered pretty much everything. I love the internal rhyme of "hall" and "fall". I love "a bed empty, a ...

I'd like to interview someone. (No one in mind, open to suggestion)Would that be any use to you? Jas

Haha. This was fun. It made me smile. I agree with Gryphon about "lots of figs". Think it would suit the rhythm better. If I really want to nit pick, ...

Since you mentioned it, it might be happier in other poetry. This was a nice idea, but could use a little tweaking. I'm not sure about; "pushing, pulling. To and ...

Hi. Welcome! First off, I'd take a look at the format of this, as it's a little sloppy, and didn't really encourage me to read this. I'd try; "I thought ...